First in the story A long day for Chris I renamed the restaurant
manager Sarah. I am not sure why I called her Nicole as well and as
it was pointed out that was confusing (especially if I use them both
Next I want to say thank you to everyone who has commented on my
stories. I am very fortunate to have so many people not just reading
but taking time to write comments as well. The comments are also very
detailed and give me a good idea of what I did well and not so well.
For instance the cutting in part 8 was not very popular so I doubt I
will go near there again. To be honest it was not the most fun story
to write but I just wanted to try the idea. While I do write what I
want to write I do allow feedback to influence me a great deal.
I have two questions I would like to ask of you and please answer
honestly (this is a safe place).
1, Main character.
The vast majority of the story has been written with Rachel as the
main protagonist. I think that focusing on her for so long has
allowed the reader to get to know her. Often in these kind of stories
the characters only last one story and you never get to know them. I
have put other characters in the lime light for a time but was
wondering should I make other characters the star?
I don’t mean move away from Rachel but maybe have an
episode/part where she is not the focus?
Post your ideas.
O' the joys of a good pop. I have featured testicle rupture but
moved away from it in the last two stories. In the world I write
about it is practised as a punishment for serious crimes. So I was
wondering if you wanted to see more of it or less? Some of you have
noticed I mentioned Rachel's work place place to authorise testicle
rupture. So then should they? If so should it be used regularly or in
very rare circumstances?
Some of you may not be the biggest fans of it but enjoyed the
anticipation of reading a story where the balls might pop. If they
don’t pop every now and again then this suspense will be lost.
So there are my questions please post your thoughts. Feel free to
build on others comments or discuss ideas but please play nice.